My Mood Today!
March 26, 2009
The abyss that stretched in front of him was about 8000 miles long. Though gregarious by nature; he kept walking alone, along the shore of solitude not knowing what to do. The mighty Varuna separated him from his country. The footprints in the sand, he knew would soon disintegrate just like his self doubts.
PS: My 55 word story thanks to inspiration from Solilo and Hitchwriter and Usha!!! This is hard!! When I first wrote this, it exceeded a hundred words, then I had to use “CNTRL X” a lot to reach 55 words!!
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Its beautifully done!
🙂 Thanks Winnie… 🙂 dont you ever sleep…. ??? you always comment late at night or early morning….. 😛
Wow!!!! Ajit, you, Solilo, – you guys have a talent!!
🙂 Thanks…. 🙂 Smitha… 🙂 appreciate it…
Ajit I work nights 😛
😛 aah, that explains it… 🙂
beautiful !:)
This is good..and very OGish:D
and it looks quite tough :)like Smitha says I amazed at the way all of you have done it:)
” The footprints in the sand, he knew would soon disintegrate just like his self doubts.”Beautiful!
Indyeah,
🙂 OGish… what does that mean???? I have not used a single “:P” in this post….. :P…
Thanks!!
😛 This is the epidemic commonly known in the Blogosphere as OGitis 😛
OGish refers to the use of human emotions and the portrayal of dilemnas..:PP
wah!I am a poet in the making 😀
Indyeah,
Wah wah!!! 🙂 I am inpressed… 🙂 you have found another new word…. 🙂
yeah, I agree, this is an OGish post…. 🙂 LOL…. you are so funny Indyeah….
and btw INdyeah,
do I come across as an emotional person and a confused soul??? I need to change that then…. 😛
emotional yes as much as any normal person,but probably more of a sensitive soul..:)
and confused?no..:)
😛
err I also lie at times :D:D
but on alternate days only:D
*trying to figure out which day this is*
😀
One doubt. only one doubt. who or what is Varuna ??? 😀 and I guess I would understand this 55 word fiction, once you answer my query. (underline I guess) LOL. Nice one.
@ Indyeah :
You lie only on alternate days??? and the rest of the days, do you sit and sleep ???? 😀
@Vimmuu:-No, then I pour my heart and become Satyawadi Harishchandra 😀
😀
PS:-There is ajoke in there somewhere:D
@Ajit
great thinking mate.. superb one 🙂
@Indyeah
/**trying to figure out which day this is*/
/*There is ajoke in there somewhere:D*/
LOL 😀
🙂 LOL Indyeah…. 🙂
okay.. point noted….. 🙂 I am not like that in real life though.. 😛
and LOL about alternate days… Now I need to know which days you speak the truth… 😛
Vimmuu Aliya,
Varuna is Lord Varuna, the lord of the oceans…. 🙂
and LOL regarding comment… 🙂
hahahahahaha
Indyeah again,
I did not get the joke… 😛
Thanks Kanagu…. 🙂
You are amazing. Do you know that Mr. Ordinary guy?
So soulful. Please do write more.
There is a contest by NY times for 55 word fiction. You must submit this for that. This is brilliant.
Thanks Solilo…. 🙂 Thanks a lot…. 🙂 I really really appreciate your comment… 😛 Thanks!!!!
Well done! I wondered if I could ever do a 55 word story. I mean, isn’t it difficult to convey something in just a few words? Could mine be as good as OG’s? Or Solilo’s? Then I realised that it could be a story in the first person. And guess what? I just did it.
Quirky Indian
The photograph is as beautiful as the story…Keep writing!
LOL QI,
that is a great 55 word story… 🙂 LoL
Bones,
Thanks… 🙂 The beach shown in photo is newport beach here in california…… 😛
Love the pic!!! With a shore like that, I wouldn’t mind some solitude!
Where was it taken?
Thanks Shalom,
the location is Newport beach, california…….
“Footprints…would soon disintegrate just like his self doubts.” Beautifully put
Beautiful 55 words story …but think, maybe Lord Varuna separated him from his country but the modern day sansar-jaal-setu kept him connected 🙂
I find it difficult to say something in just 55 words 🙂
thanks Vinod Sir…. 🙂
lol ihm,
thanks….
yes the “modern day sansar-jaal-setu” has kept og connected….:P
sorry bhai… I am late… office mein boss ki vaapsi ho gayi hai… so i m slow…
lovely ajit !!
I told ya you have story telling talent…
and those lines are apt… most apt… atleast for me….
wish there were a beach somewhere near Indore !! lol…
totally godawesome! Esp the reference to Varuna… loved it.
Thanks Dhiru bhai…. 🙂 thanks to you, I have started my morning on a bright note…. 😛
HDWK,
Thanks!!! 🙂
Beautifully done. Enjoyed the post. You have motivated me to do one too. Posting one right now.
Awed. Just that 🙂
And the soul that searched here, found the answer by the end… in the ocean of consciousness, there is not place for flimsy self doubts.
Awesome close. Truly. Loved it!
Thanks JPJ SIr…. waiting for your post…
Wooah Usha,
you have done a better job than my original post…. 🙂 I salute you
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Good one mate .
Very beautifully done! I am seriously thinking of taking it up!
nice 🙂
i could NEVER write a 55 word story… the first paragraph wud itself run into more than 200 words 😛
so congrats! brevity is an art in itself… esp when so beautifully articulated 🙂 (see? there i go again! 😛 )
Thanks Kislay…
Yes Amit, take it up… 🙂
Aswathy, LOL…. hehehehehe.. Thanks… and yes, maybe write something first, then use the CUT option mercilessly…. 🙂 only way it works….
Ajit I am usually late but this is a great story. But distance does teaches a lot of love to.
nicely done 🙂