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March 26, 2009

The abyss that stretched in front of him was about 8000 miles long. Though gregarious by nature; he kept walking alone, along the shore of solitude not knowing what to do. The mighty Varuna separated him from his country. The footprints in the sand, he knew would soon disintegrate just like his self doubts.

PS: My 55 word story thanks to inspiration from Solilo and Hitchwriter and Usha!!! This is hard!! When I first wrote this, it exceeded a hundred words, then I had to use “CNTRL X” a lot to reach 55 words!!
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  1. Winnie the poohi permalink
    March 26, 2009 5:41 pm

    Its beautifully done!

  2. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 5:44 pm

    πŸ™‚ Thanks Winnie… πŸ™‚ dont you ever sleep…. ??? you always comment late at night or early morning….. πŸ˜›

  3. Smitha permalink
    March 26, 2009 5:55 pm

    Wow!!!! Ajit, you, Solilo, – you guys have a talent!!

  4. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 5:56 pm

    πŸ™‚ Thanks…. πŸ™‚ Smitha… πŸ™‚ appreciate it…

  5. Winnie the poohi permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:14 pm

    Ajit I work nights πŸ˜›

  6. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:20 pm

    πŸ˜› aah, that explains it… πŸ™‚

  7. Indyeah permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:21 pm

    beautiful !:)
    This is good..and very OGish:D
    and it looks quite tough :)like Smitha says I amazed at the way all of you have done it:)

    ” The footprints in the sand, he knew would soon disintegrate just like his self doubts.”Beautiful!

  8. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:24 pm

    Indyeah,
    πŸ™‚ OGish… what does that mean???? I have not used a single “:P” in this post….. :P…

    Thanks!!

  9. Indyeah permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:31 pm

    πŸ˜› This is the epidemic commonly known in the Blogosphere as OGitis πŸ˜›

    OGish refers to the use of human emotions and the portrayal of dilemnas..:PP

    wah!I am a poet in the making πŸ˜€

  10. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:34 pm

    Indyeah,

    Wah wah!!! πŸ™‚ I am inpressed… πŸ™‚ you have found another new word…. πŸ™‚

    yeah, I agree, this is an OGish post…. πŸ™‚ LOL…. you are so funny Indyeah….

  11. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:37 pm

    and btw INdyeah,
    do I come across as an emotional person and a confused soul??? I need to change that then…. πŸ˜›

  12. Indyeah permalink
    March 26, 2009 6:46 pm

    emotional yes as much as any normal person,but probably more of a sensitive soul..:)
    and confused?no..:)

    πŸ˜›
    err I also lie at times :D:D

    but on alternate days only:D

    *trying to figure out which day this is*

    πŸ˜€

  13. vimmuuu permalink
    March 26, 2009 7:09 pm

    One doubt. only one doubt. who or what is Varuna ??? πŸ˜€ and I guess I would understand this 55 word fiction, once you answer my query. (underline I guess) LOL. Nice one.

    @ Indyeah :

    You lie only on alternate days??? and the rest of the days, do you sit and sleep ???? πŸ˜€

  14. Indyeah permalink
    March 26, 2009 7:22 pm

    @Vimmuu:-No, then I pour my heart and become Satyawadi Harishchandra πŸ˜€

    πŸ˜€

    PS:-There is ajoke in there somewhere:D

  15. kanagu permalink
    March 26, 2009 7:52 pm

    @Ajit

    great thinking mate.. superb one πŸ™‚

    @Indyeah
    /**trying to figure out which day this is*/

    /*There is ajoke in there somewhere:D*/

    LOL πŸ˜€

  16. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 7:59 pm

    πŸ™‚ LOL Indyeah…. πŸ™‚

    okay.. point noted….. πŸ™‚ I am not like that in real life though.. πŸ˜›

    and LOL about alternate days… Now I need to know which days you speak the truth… πŸ˜›

    Vimmuu Aliya,

    Varuna is Lord Varuna, the lord of the oceans…. πŸ™‚
    and LOL regarding comment… πŸ™‚
    hahahahahaha

    Indyeah again,
    I did not get the joke… πŸ˜›

    Thanks Kanagu…. πŸ™‚

  17. Solilo permalink
    March 26, 2009 8:57 pm

    You are amazing. Do you know that Mr. Ordinary guy?

    So soulful. Please do write more.

    There is a contest by NY times for 55 word fiction. You must submit this for that. This is brilliant.

  18. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 26, 2009 9:12 pm

    Thanks Solilo…. πŸ™‚ Thanks a lot…. πŸ™‚ I really really appreciate your comment… πŸ˜› Thanks!!!!

  19. Quirky Indian permalink
    March 27, 2009 4:19 am

    Well done! I wondered if I could ever do a 55 word story. I mean, isn’t it difficult to convey something in just a few words? Could mine be as good as OG’s? Or Solilo’s? Then I realised that it could be a story in the first person. And guess what? I just did it.

    Quirky Indian

  20. Bones permalink
    March 27, 2009 4:23 am

    The photograph is as beautiful as the story…Keep writing!

  21. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 27, 2009 4:31 am

    LOL QI,
    that is a great 55 word story… πŸ™‚ LoL

    Bones,

    Thanks… πŸ™‚ The beach shown in photo is newport beach here in california…… πŸ˜›

  22. Shalom permalink
    March 27, 2009 4:35 am

    Love the pic!!! With a shore like that, I wouldn’t mind some solitude!

    Where was it taken?

  23. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 27, 2009 4:36 am

    Thanks Shalom,
    the location is Newport beach, california…….

  24. Vinod_Sharma permalink
    March 27, 2009 5:34 am

    “Footprints…would soon disintegrate just like his self doubts.” Beautifully put

  25. Indian Home Maker permalink
    March 27, 2009 5:37 am

    Beautiful 55 words story …but think, maybe Lord Varuna separated him from his country but the modern day sansar-jaal-setu kept him connected πŸ™‚

    I find it difficult to say something in just 55 words πŸ™‚

  26. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 27, 2009 5:46 am

    thanks Vinod Sir…. πŸ™‚

    lol ihm,
    thanks….
    yes the “modern day sansar-jaal-setu” has kept og connected….:P

  27. hitch writer permalink
    March 27, 2009 8:54 am

    sorry bhai… I am late… office mein boss ki vaapsi ho gayi hai… so i m slow…

    lovely ajit !!

    I told ya you have story telling talent…

    and those lines are apt… most apt… atleast for me….

    wish there were a beach somewhere near Indore !! lol…

  28. How do we know permalink
    March 27, 2009 9:42 am

    totally godawesome! Esp the reference to Varuna… loved it.

  29. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 27, 2009 4:01 pm

    Thanks Dhiru bhai…. πŸ™‚ thanks to you, I have started my morning on a bright note…. πŸ˜›

    HDWK,
    Thanks!!! πŸ™‚

  30. J P Joshi permalink
    March 27, 2009 6:12 pm

    Beautifully done. Enjoyed the post. You have motivated me to do one too. Posting one right now.

  31. Usha Pisharody permalink
    March 27, 2009 6:21 pm

    Awed. Just that πŸ™‚

    And the soul that searched here, found the answer by the end… in the ocean of consciousness, there is not place for flimsy self doubts.

    Awesome close. Truly. Loved it!

  32. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 27, 2009 7:20 pm

    Thanks JPJ SIr…. waiting for your post…

    Wooah Usha,
    you have done a better job than my original post…. πŸ™‚ I salute you

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    March 27, 2009 7:21 pm

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  34. Kislay permalink
    March 27, 2009 7:53 pm

    Good one mate .

  35. amit permalink
    March 29, 2009 3:12 pm

    Very beautifully done! I am seriously thinking of taking it up!

  36. Ashwathy permalink
    March 29, 2009 5:50 pm

    nice πŸ™‚
    i could NEVER write a 55 word story… the first paragraph wud itself run into more than 200 words πŸ˜›
    so congrats! brevity is an art in itself… esp when so beautifully articulated πŸ™‚ (see? there i go again! πŸ˜› )

  37. Ordinary Guy permalink
    March 29, 2009 9:38 pm

    Thanks Kislay…

    Yes Amit, take it up… πŸ™‚

    Aswathy, LOL…. hehehehehe.. Thanks… and yes, maybe write something first, then use the CUT option mercilessly…. πŸ™‚ only way it works….

  38. Chirag permalink
    March 31, 2009 8:05 am

    Ajit I am usually late but this is a great story. But distance does teaches a lot of love to.

  39. June 10, 2009 5:10 pm

    nicely done πŸ™‚

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